In their classic primer "The Elements of Style," William Strunk and E.B. White admonish all writers to "revise and rewrite." "Few writers," they say, "are so expert that they can produce what they are after on the first try." Even Vladimir Nabokov, whom many consider one of the greatest prose stylists of the 20th century, once told an interviewer, "Spontaneous eloquence seems to me a miracle. I have rewritten -- often several times -- every word I have ever published. My pencils outlast their erasers." All writing requires revision, and this includes rewording sentences.
Eliminate unnecessary words.
John Major, who was once prime minister of Great Britain, is a man whom I respect.
This easily becomes:
I respect former British Prime Minister John Major.
Here you can cut the appositive, cancel two unneeded linking verbs, and replace the wordy prepositional phrase with a simple adjective.
Use the active voice in rewording a sentence. This means making the subject of the sentence responsible for the action of the sentence. The active voice reads more forcefully and is more concise.
The book was read by her with great delight.
She read the book with great delight.
Replace cliches and other tired phrases with words that more clearly reflect the point you are trying to make.
The heat was stifling.
Readers have most likely heard this too many times for it to mean anything. Instead, give specific, concrete details about the hot weather:
Though he had not moved, sweat soaked his shirt.
Change negative statements to positive ones.
He was not unhappy to be meeting her at the train station.
He was glad to meet her at the train station.
Distribute clauses evenly throughout your sentence, paying attention to rhythm and sentence length. This can mean either breaking a long sentence in two or combining two short sentences.
George Eliot, author of novels such as "The Mill on the Floss" and "Middlemarch," is the woman's favorite novelist of all time.
George Eliot is the author of novels such as "The Mill on the Floss" and "Middlemarch." She is the woman's favorite novelist of all time.
His wife was beautiful. She loved him.
His wife was beautiful, and she loved him.